This is the opening shot for my Pre-Viz of the prison, I copied the design straight from my story board while trying to keep the black and white tone consistent with the rest of the set, so I decided to make the prison a dark grey to portray a more looming and dark side of the story (and also to suit Prison 048, dark grey colour). For a lot of my set I decided to keep them as basic as possible with cubes and panels to design them.  This second scene is the prison food hall and where I had to start importing in one of the model figures for scale, as I needed to design the hall to be a big presence in the scene and enough to hold a few of the model figures. I only added in the tables and the doors on the lower floor as they are the only important parts within the scene.  Next is the hallway scene, for this I needed to find a way to fit in the prison room and insert the peek holes into the door so I could place the camera within it. incase the camera doesn't wor...

Some final designs for my three main characters in my story. I decided to adapt on my last thumbnails while also taking inspiration from some feedback on my OGR- looking at a more noir style, and concentrating on expressing the style of the characters more confidently. So for Dave the protagonist, I wanted to draw him when he becomes a body builder, but separate him more from Prisoner 048 by giving him a more rounded body, to show he's more kinder then Prisoner 048 who has a more square and sharper body size. The doctor I wanted to be more skinny, so he's separated from the prisoners, while still looking more confident even though he's smaller in size then the rest.

Tried producing some more thumbnails on Dave, my protagonist. I want to develop him further using the prompts given in my feedback, however I wanted to try and get a general idea of him while I had more time and then see how I could develop him further. I think now I have a general idea of what I want him to look like, I'm gonna try and stylise him more along with the prisoner.

Decided to start by making some influence maps of my objects before I make some for my characters and explore a bit more into some of the themes I would like to carry over. I think I will keep the tone of the animation a bit dark, maybe even make the animation black and white to suit the themes of the prison. I also think at this point I will set the animation in modern day to make it easier, although I have also considered setting it in the future as well to make the diet pills and the extreme work out more believable.

First draft of my script. I'm still worried it might be a bit too big, so some feedback on the length of the script would be appreciated as well as feedback on the plot again.

After some food feedback I finally edited through my second idea to make it more understandable. Feedback would still be appreciated on the structure and the length of the story, but I have changed some of the conflict and tried to make the story more consistent in some ways. 

After some feedback I decided to re-write my initial story, taking on the feedback I have been given while also making some choices. Firstly, rather I thought rather than the conflict being between two guards, it could be between a guard and a prisoner who's running the prison, making the external conflict more extended than just the guard wanting to fit in.  But, I don't think the story is quite there yet and feedback would be appreciated. For a start I don't know if the guard / prisoner conflict works in relation to the method he takes to pursue becoming a bodybuilder (like is the conflict too dramatic to justify what he does or is it too un-realistic ?) . Also I still have some problems with my ending, as I was torn between having this ending, that I'm worried could be seen as a cheap ending, because the first scene plays out with a clear goal, and it never gets resolved in the end, or whether I should, of have had a happy ending, where the guards hard wo...

After a conversation and some more thought I have finally managed to narrow down the mind maps into two story ideas that I think I can work with. I'm happy that I managed to draw away from the setting being in a prison that I felt made the idea feel generic and easy, whereas with these ideas I feel I can manipulate the layout or the tone to see how it effects the final piece, although I still have a way to go with characters, conflict, story layout and ending. Feedback is still appreciated.

I took on board some feedback from my last mind map and tried to broaden out with some more ideas to see how the story could go, I'm still not certain how the story will go, but I have a couple that i could develop, but feedback would appreciated so I could get an idea of what ideas work.

 I had the most fun planning this, but I did have some trouble deciding what to do with the microscope and I feel I would like a few more suggestions however I already have some ideas formed from doing this and feel confident enough to plan out a plot and story from using these. The prison I feel is the most flexible feature and the one I might mess with more in the story because it could be used metaphorically rather than the microscope which I feel some people might not know what it looks like. The bodybuilder I might play it safe and make it male so it fits the archetype better but play with what visually is a bodybuilder within the story to make it more interesting.