Script to Screen: Story Re-Write
After some feedback I decided to re-write my initial story, taking on the feedback I have been given while also making some choices. Firstly, rather I thought rather than the conflict being between two guards, it could be between a guard and a prisoner who's running the prison, making the external conflict more extended than just the guard wanting to fit in. But, I don't think the story is quite there yet and feedback would be appreciated. For a start I don't know if the guard / prisoner conflict works in relation to the method he takes to pursue becoming a bodybuilder (like is the conflict too dramatic to justify what he does or is it too un-realistic ?) . Also I still have some problems with my ending, as I was torn between having this ending, that I'm worried could be seen as a cheap ending, because the first scene plays out with a clear goal, and it never gets resolved in the end, or whether I should, of have had a happy ending, where the guards hard wo...