Script to Screen: Script Draft 01

First draft of my script. I'm still worried it might be a bit too big, so some feedback on the length of the script would be appreciated as well as feedback on the plot again.

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  1. tutorphilFebruary 1, 2019 at 1:22 AM

    Hey Odette - so I think what you need to do now is just move into storyboarding this out now: it still reads bit complex to me, but I don't think 'it is' really - and I think just 'seeing it' will make this clear - and indeed any excess fat for trimming off... make a start!

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