Fantastic Voyage: Script 02 Edit


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  1. Yep - this feels more unpacked now; I would say the final paragraph seems a little long and also it's directed at the audience as opposed to the tortoise, which is the first time in your script the Finch breaks the 4th wall; maybe the finch should just continue 'teaching' the tortoise - or maybe consider having the finch talk directly to the audience earlier so it's part of what you've got going on?

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