Alien and Monstrous Feminine.
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Sound Experiment 04
Today I decided to record some more natural sounds, this time seeing how the sound of wind would sound through a window before I recorded it outside, as I think the slight whistling noise through the window would make it sound more interesting, I am planning on collecting more natural sounds, but I wanted to see how it would sound before I progressed onwards in case the background noise was too much in comparison to the wind and ruined it. For the second sound for my second image, I wanted to continue to find something more sharper so I tried to record the sound of cactus spikes, particularly if I ran my fingers through it, as it makes a very sharp, high pitched sound that I think could work better, especially if I could replicate the sound to reflect the more smaller portions of the image. Lastly I wanted to try and collect a more electronic sound for image one, to match its sharp, electric colours so I wanted to start by recording a microwave, as I thought is humming noi
Hey Odette - okay, so you've got the start of a Thesis here! What's satisfying here is the proactive and creative application of theory to your subject and the real sense of enthusiasm and 'sparking' that comes from your writing... BUT, there are issues of form and structure you need to take on board in terms of refining the delivery mechanism of your ideas; you need to ask yourself this question always: 'What does the reader need?' This analysis presumes a lot of prior information - it assumes the reader is already familiar with the architecture of Freud's ideas (which you use, but do not introduce or define); it presumes the reader is familiar with the story of Alien (there is no story synopsis, you see...); it presumes we're familiar with the ideas of Laura Mulvey (who isn't introduced) and so on. In terms of planning your written assignments, you need to ask yourself what the reader is going to need from you in order to follow your argument effortlessly. The ability to think like the uninitiated reader is KEY to determining effective structures for successful assignments. You also need to proof-read for grammatical stuff - lots of missing possessive apostrophes in here (so 'Mother's' as opposed to Mothers etc).
ReplyDeleteShort version - there's an imbalance here between high-performance theoretical creativity (great!) and coherence and concept-initiation. Put simply, you need to plan before you write in order to more fully capture the sophistication of what you're trying to argue. Onwards!