Written review for the Cabinet of Dr. Caligari by Robert Wiene
Caligair Review Word by Odette on Scribd
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Hi Odette!
ReplyDeleteWell done on getting your first review out there :)
You've obviously given this a lot of thought, and have embedded your quotes nicely within the text - be careful though that you don't 'over-quote'...that is, use a quote just for the sake of it, when you could perhaps paraphrase (paraphrasing also needs to be referenced in a similar way to the quote).
A few more images might have been useful, especially since you spend a lot of time talking about the various colours used - some still showing the difference between the day and night shots perhaps.
It's always worth re-reading what you have written, just to make sure that everything is as it should be and makes sense... I had a little chuckle at the 'red herring murderer' :)
On a final note, please could you change the background of the blog to something a little darker... the white lettering on the pale pink background is really difficult to read!