Animatic With New Opening Animatic with No New Opening After spending some time away from my project, I finally decided to re-vist it with a fresh new outlook and to edit some of the issues I was having with it. I first decided to change the opening, which I felt didn't work very well within the original animatic, and I wanted something that highlighted the isolation as well as the light that plays a big part in the story. I also re-wrote and cut out sections in the middle, to try and shorten the animatic because I felt that it was dragging to long, and I could condense the story a bit more and still have the same effect. Unformatuntly, despite me doing this, I don't seem to have made any time difference, despite taking out and editing a large portion of the middle of the story, so I am going to have to be a bit more brutal and get some advice for what to do next, as the story is still too long. However, of the two versions I have uploaded here, the first on...
Hi Odette!
ReplyDeleteWell done on getting your first review out there :)
You've obviously given this a lot of thought, and have embedded your quotes nicely within the text - be careful though that you don't 'over-quote'...that is, use a quote just for the sake of it, when you could perhaps paraphrase (paraphrasing also needs to be referenced in a similar way to the quote).
A few more images might have been useful, especially since you spend a lot of time talking about the various colours used - some still showing the difference between the day and night shots perhaps.
It's always worth re-reading what you have written, just to make sure that everything is as it should be and makes sense... I had a little chuckle at the 'red herring murderer' :)
On a final note, please could you change the background of the blog to something a little darker... the white lettering on the pale pink background is really difficult to read!